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nature haiku
Posted: Tue Sep 20, 2016 6:32 pm
by illyav
I wrote this haiku in a poetry workshop I took last year:
creek cascades down,
pooling and overflowing—
endless beginnings
Re: nature haiku
Posted: Tue Sep 20, 2016 6:37 pm
by rlown
Sierra in View
So many places to see
Hard to pick just one
Had a friend I worked with for 10 years. We communicated sometimes in Haiku. Nice one though.
Re: nature haiku
Posted: Tue Sep 20, 2016 7:38 pm
by Jimr
Now I'm inspired. Gotta figure this one out.
Re: nature haiku
Posted: Tue Sep 20, 2016 7:50 pm
by rlown
if you want more syllables to work with, look up Tanka.. otherwise, the cadence is 5, 7, 5. Heck, all mgmt slides should be just that.
illyav's was better than mine. supposed to twist the last line with meaning.
Re: nature haiku
Posted: Tue Sep 20, 2016 8:02 pm
by Jimr
Cascading slowly
icy tendrils envelope
Another night's sleep
Re: nature haiku
Posted: Tue Sep 20, 2016 8:04 pm
by rlown
Re: nature haiku
Posted: Tue Sep 20, 2016 8:05 pm
by Jimr
rlown wrote:if you want more syllables to work with, look up Tanka.. otherwise, the cadence is 5, 7, 5. Heck, all mgmt slides should be just that.
illyav's was better than mine. supposed to twist the last line with meaning.
Russ, if that was for me, my initial post wasn't supposed to be haiku

Re: nature haiku
Posted: Tue Sep 20, 2016 8:08 pm
by rlown
it was for you.. you did well.
Re: nature haiku
Posted: Tue Sep 20, 2016 11:13 pm
by Jimr
Re: nature haiku
Posted: Wed Sep 21, 2016 6:40 am
by The Other Tom
I'm not much of an artsy person, but I like it

Good job!